Monday, August 15, 2011

Halloween Poem? Critique?

I think it's mostly fine, I would take out the A though in Fighting for candy like (a) wild boars. I'm not so sure about the Eating goblins, ghouls, and wild beasts either. I would use a different adjective than heavy in As children shriek in heavy fear also. Other than that it's kinda catchy.

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